How to Write a TOEFL Essay Conclusion

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Writing the conclusion

First we have to look at our thesis statement:

No police officer should ever carry a gun.

Next we look at our two topic senteces:

First of all, guns cause more harm than good.

In addition to the previous point, in most cases police officers don't need guns.

Now we simply put them all into one paragraph, beginning with the thesis statement:

In conclusion, police officers should not carry guns. Guns usually cause harm to people. Moreover, police officers often don't need them to do their jobs.

Maybe you have noticed that we made small changes to the thesis statement and topic sentences. This is becuase it's not good to copy the sentences exactly--it's boring for the reader. These changes give our writing more variety.

We also added two transitional phrases to our conclusion: in conclusion and moreover. We'll talk about these in a separate lesson. For now, let's go to the next page and see our essay!